英语六级翻译(二)

1. 题目

   

2. 原翻译

   The Song dynasty start on 960 year end on 1279 year[^1].In this term[^2],the development of chinese economy[^3] ahead[^4] too quickly to be the main economist[^5] all over the world[^6],the science,technology,psychologist[^7] and math[^8] growed to prosperity as well.China in song dynasty is[^9] the first country which use money of paper in world history.The Song dynasty is also the most early country use boom[^10]and invented the moveable-type copy[^11][12].With the development population,more and more people moved to city and there are affluent entertainment place with many people.Social lifes are variable.People gathered to enjoy and trade is crowded chriesh[^13] masterpiece.[^14]The political system of administration[^15] is very advanced at that time.The official was choosen by competive examination.

   注解:

   • 1:这里的翻译感觉不太规范,建议改成lasted form 960 year till 1279 year
   • 2:term通常表示学期,这里建议用固定搭配during the period
   • 3:chinese economy与china's economy:前者强调economy,chinese作为修饰;后者则强调economy是从属于china
   • 4:ahead是一个adv,不是v.这里可以修改为advanced(注意通篇保持过去式)
   • 5:ecnomist:经济学家(可以联想《economist》);economy:经济(这里可以直接引申为经济体)
   • 6:对应原文"中国经济大幅增长,称为世界上最先进的经济体",而too…to…译为太...以致于,通常用于表示引起了负面的,糟糕的后果.这里建议使用so..that....注意,后跟becoming
   • 7:区分物理,心理,哲学:
     • 物理:physics
     • 心理:psychology
     • 哲学:philosophy
   • 8:数学通常译为mathematics,而不是math
   • 9:注意时态应为过去式,因为这里特指宋朝时期的中国
   • 10:火药:gunpowder
   • 11:printing:打印
   • 12:语法错误,country与use之间无法直接连接使用,可以使用非限制定于从句或后置定语的形式
   • 13:cherish:珍惜(v).这里可以使用precious
   • 14:注意复数,先把可以做到的细节做好
   • 15:最好带上时间in song

3. 修改后的翻译

   The Song Dynasty was lasted on 960 year till 1279 year.During this period,the deveopment of chinese economy advanced so quickly that becoming the main economy al over the world,science,technology,philosopher and mathematics growed to be prosperity as well.China in Song Dynasty is the first country which issue the money of paper among the world's history.The Song Country is also the most early country which use/using gunpowder and invented the movable-type painting.With the growth of population,more and more people moved to city and there are affluent entertainment place was crowded.Social lifes are varieable.People gathered to enjoy and trade precious masterpieces.The political system in Song was advanced at that time,officials were choosen by competive examination.

4. 补充

   • 通篇保持:时态